ted talk discussion

I believe that i am lucky because i have already found a career that i love and has a future. What i love is flying and just being above the ground safely. What i want to do as a career would be to be a pilot. I think that being a pilot would be the best job i could possibly have. Tomorrow i will study harder on my aviation classes and work harder on my ground school in order to reinforce that. I want to be able to focus more on aviation classes and do the best i possibly can on them so that idea can come true. I will try to be the best pilot student i can to get ahead of the curve and do what i want to do sooner and as one of the best.

my research question

1. I chose this topic because because I don't have an answer for it yet. I will be researching for the answer to the question: Does the federal government spend too much of aid? It interests me and
i will be able to write about it.
2.I want to be able to answer the question on if the government spends too much on federal aid or if it not enough. I want to be able to say weather or not the government is overspending and people have just gotten used to getting money for free or if the people need more money.
3. I want to research this question because I believe it is an issue that is talked about today and that affects everyone in some way. It affects people in that it helps them or that it takes money out of their pocket. It is a widely talked about topic and it interests me.
4. I need to learn more about where all the government spending goes and how it helps or hurts people.I need to learn about the aid and how it has risen in recent years and if that has made it better or if more people are taking advantage of it.
5. I need to get information from experts on government spending maybe in the field of history or american government.

reflecting experience wp#2

I thought that we started this paper off very fast and were not given much time to choose a topic. I did find a topic that fit me well though. i kept to my design plan very well, i feel like. I didn't sway from my design plan and kept the paper how i originally planned it to be. Finding the sources was not hard, as it is a broad topic but i did have trouble combining them. My original paper did not do a good job at synthesizing but in my final revisions i did get the sources to inter mingle and work better together. After going to the writing center i realized that i needed to fix the paper to fit the assignment better. I added quotes to fit together better and fixed many grammar. I still kept to my original design plan but i did move my paper around so that it would fill the assignment requirements better. My paper does sound like an argumentative paper at times but it does tie back into facts that i found. When at the writing center the tutor believed that the argument sounding parts tied the paper together so i left those parts in. The paper was a challenge but i do think that i did better than the last paper. I tried to introduce the quotes then tie them into my writing. Then i would summarize the quote then introduce the next quote and try to tie them together and repeat the process.

Today we did the second peer reviews of writing project two. It went well and we have already finished the review. we only had to do one review because one person in our group has been missing and does not have a first draft finished. The persons paper we reviewed was very well written and had good flow. the transitions that were used were well placed and allowed for easy transition into the next paragraphs. I thought that the peer reviews went well and that the papers involved had a good start. Every paper needs some revising but every paper always does. For a college paper i think they will turn out well and we gave advice on how to make it even better

Explanatory Synthesis Notes
Describing topic- My topic is about gun control and how more gun control can be harmful. In it i plan to explain how guns have helped with crime and violence but also how the have helped to create violence. that guns can be used as a way to deter criminals before they even commit a crime. I plan on using statistics to show places with high number of gun compared to crime rate. That not only gun owners but more importantly people with concealed carry permits could be the key to lower crime rates. In a study of criminals, people are less likely to commit a crime for fear of citizens having a gun rather than the police showing up. I am going to try and stay away from using fear as a persuader because that is how anti gun lobbyist are trying to gain support. I have the facts that will hopefully show people my age that guns are not the problem, the people are the problem.

source 1 - Gun free zones are less helpful that expected - This article does have some bias towards my point of view but also shows facts that i would like to use. It goes into how places that have concealed carry practice are have lower crime rates while places like Chicago where gun laws are the strictest have the highest crime rates.

source 2 - Gun utopias? ...  This article is a fairly unbiased article but does show statistics that help my cause. It goes into places that have a low crime rate and low gun ownership like places like Switzerland and takes statistics with crime rates. The rates show how yet the crime rate is low, violent crimes are still committed with guns and that strict gun laws have not stopped guns from being used.

source 3 - Why I Chose the Gun - this is a ted talk by Peter van Uhm and he mostly talks about how guns have came to help lower crime rates dramatically in the last 500 years and how they can be a tool of peace not just war. That guns in the proper hand enforce peace rather than commit crimes. I take that idea into the common community, with more guns in the hands of people that want peace can lower crime rates.

Explaining shooting

Shooting has become a bad thing in the eyes of a lot of society in recent years. Shooting for most of the gun owning population is just a popular pass time to have fun. We have fun challenging ourselves to take a tougher and tougher shot. i personally like the long range shooting because it inst something you can just do without practice and knowledge, it takes a certain skill set that you need to work up. It teaches you about your body and how the slightest detail can mess up the shot. You know what the wind does to a bullet even how your heart beat can effect a bullet. My longest shots are hitting a chest sized target from 500 yards away 7 out of 10 times. I am very interested in shooting because it is an expertise, something that is trained for and not just given. It requires you to put in your best effort and the rewards of hitting that target 500 yards away is amazing. you are overwhelmed with pride because you know you earned it and no one else effected that moment in any way. I am also fantasized by watching the bullet travel through the air for about 3 seconds. many can say the have shot a gun but not many can say that they watched their very own shot travel through the air with a great arc and strike the target. You can see the bullet hit far before you hear the ting of metal on metal. I am so interested in shooting because you earn what you are given, everything is it that exact moment, and it is a fantasizing thing to watch from long distances.

My experience writing this was quite strange, we are always told to never write about yourself and here we are writing some personal narrative in our first paper. I learned a lot about writing in the pre writing exercises that we did before we even started the paper but the paper really sealed them in. I think that I did stick to my design plan for the most part and that I do not need to change my design plan, writing the personal narrative part of the story was the hardest part for me because I am not used to writing about myself. I actually did not have any personal narrative until the final draft when i went to the writing center. Until the very end I would sat that I did not accomplish what I set out to do. I did round it out after the writing center visit however and I think that I turned in a well-executed paper. Without the peer reviews and the writing center i do not know if i would have caught my big mistake. Writing about myself has been for so long said is a bad thing to do and that i should never need to. It was difficult to add in my personal narrative and i think i could have done better but i did not know exactly how it was supposed to be done. The rubric called for some personal narrative so i figured that it should not be a bulk of the essay so not that much is personal narrative just the bare minimum. There could be far more personal narrative but i did not see this project as a life story. I took it as an opportunity to talk about a very broad subject and add the minimum amounts of personal narrative to it.